[ مذاكرة جماعية ] : طلاب مشروع التخرج د. عبدالعزيز التركي

[Abu-Elyaas]

أووووف يعني الموعد طاف ...

كيف النظام الحين ؟

[Saudi__]

لا الموعد ما طاف اخر موعد

Submission of the final draft: Week 14 on or before Thursday 18/12/2014

باقي 15 يوم تقريبا

[ابولمبه]

الاخ saudi الله يجزاك الف خير عالتوضيح ولكن انا مالقيتها في اخر رد هل معناته ان البحث كويس وفيه اشياء طلب اعدلها في رسالته الطويله هل اعدلها او ارسل الفاينل درافت الحين ولك الشكر .

[Saudi__]

( ابولمبه) ياليت تنسخ الاشياء اللي طلبها منك ممكن تكون عامه للكل

[نجم عالي]

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته

يارجاجيل هذا اللي حصلته في Action Items :
Please follow the format suggested in the guide (e.g. title- abstract- introduction – literature review—methodology) and write paragraphs under each heading.
Please organize your sections as suggested in the guide.

مدري وش يبي الدكتور بالله أحد يفهمني هذا واحد والثاني الرساله الطويله وهي كالتالي أيضا أتعبني الدكتور مدري وش يبي فهمونا يارجاجيل ولكم الشكر:


First, I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for submitting your first drafts, good job!! . I have read all of your research proposals and I enjoyed reading many of them. Nevertheless, there were some issues that need to be addressed and those issues were shared in many proposals. I summarize serious issues below and I hope that you find them useful. The issues are expected as this is your first time writing a research proposal but you need to amend your documents and work on those issues and then submit the final draft on/before the deadline.

The title has to be specific. It must tell the reader what exactly s/he will read. General topics are not accepted. For example (teaching speaking in Saudi Arabia = general and not accepted / The effectiveness of X method in improving students' speaking fluency in Y school in Z city = clear and specific). Please read the guide for more information. Your title and other sections, clearly, have to reflect what you are going to include in the research questions/methodology sections. Your title is very long , please improve it and make it concise.
The abstract should summarise your study.
The clarity of expression needs some improvements (e.g. some sentences are not clearly written). You might need to revise your document for grammatical errors as well. Some students wrote notes instead of paragraphs so please be advised that this is not acceptable.
The table of contents should be organized in headings (e.g. 1 ----- 1.1 / 2 --- 2.1) where necessary. This link shows you how to create a table of content. http://office.microsoft.com/en-us/wo...001225372.aspx

Please follow the format suggested in the guide (e.g. title- abstract- introduction – literature review—methodology) and write paragraphs under each heading. Please organize your sections as suggested in the guide. Please avoid writing in notes or short phrases. A paragraph or so under each heading will be enough (read the guide for the exact number of paragraphs).

When you introduce an idea, please cite the reference. In other words, tell the reader where you read this idea (e.g. X is important in teaching Y according to White (1995). Then you need to include this source in the reference list. You can use some websites to help you organize your reference lists (e.g. reference machine).

In the significance of research section, you need to convince the reader about the importance of your research, not the topic (e.g. why is YOUR RESEARCH important?). you need to improve this section

Your literature review has to be written in a coherent way. The sentences have to be linked to each other logically. There must be a clear 'line of argument' that the reader can follow. Towards the end of the literature review section, you have to reach the RESEARCH GAP. In other words, you need to Say that X did this, Y did that which is similar to what Z did but nobody looked at this issue (and this will be your main research point/question). You can work on your existing literature review or add few references to make the line of argument clear.

Your research question/s have to be specific and related to one point only, which is the focus of your study. Some students included two or more research questions that are not related to each other and this is not acceptable. Also, you need to clearly state your research question/s or hypotheses after describing them in the paragraph (e.g. in numbered notes). did you mean teachers' OR students' opinions about the reasons of X in Y country ??? If this is what you meant then you can write a research question reflecting this.. Also, make it clear in the methodology.


Importantly, your methodology has to be appropriate for your research question. You can't use questionnaires to find a good way to teach speaking (for example). You can, of course, use questionnaires or interviews to elicit people's perceptions / thoughts about an idea, method, or approach. You need to write few sentences about your method (e.g. questionnaires/interviews or experiment). Mentioning that you will use X method is not enough. For instance, in my experiment there will be X, Y and Z. X is this. Y is that. Then you can explain how you will analyze your results (e.g. I will analyze the data qualitatively/ quantitatively --- I will use statistic tests - or will calculate the average of X -......etc.).
Please focus on the questionnaire and ignore other methods (e.g. references are not methods).

You need to tell us more about the limitations and ethical considerations.
In the Ethical consideration section, you might want to mention whether your participants are vulnerable (e.g. children – people with special needs…etc.). Also you might want to mention that you will get the 'ethical approval' from your department/college before colleting the data. Think about the 'consent form' which is a form participants have to sign. What will you include in it ? perhaps telling them what you are going to do with the data and who will have access to it, how you will analyze the data, and your contact information. You also need to tell them that they can withdraw from the experiment at any time.

Limitations of the study has nothing to do with where you will conduct the research (e.g. the study will be conducted here or there…etc.). It is about the factors that could negatively influence your research (e.g. time limitations, possible delays due to XXX, participants might not take the questionnaires seriously/understand it…etc.).

Please avoid writing as if the study has been carried out and published as this is a 'proposal' (e.g. the participants 'did not do this and that'). This is a proposal so you can write about what 'might/could happen' while conducting the research. In other words, avoid using the past form 'the research was conducted in X city' and use the future 'the research will be conducted in….etc'.

Please only cite references that you have used and cited in your writing. Some students included references that they have not used in their writing and that is time-consuming because I have to read and check whether that student used the article or not in his writing. If you used it, cite it like this – X (year) said/stated/proposed/advocated/…etc.

Please follow APA citation guidelines available here http://www.library.cornell.edu/resrch/citmanage/apa

Or you can use an online service that will do that for you. http://www.citationmachine.net/apa/cite-a-book#


GENERAL REMINDER: Please avoid PLAGIARISM, copying or translating anyone else's work/research. When you submit your final draft, your paper will have to be checked by a software that can detect any copied, paraphrased or translated work that has not been referenced. Plagiarized work will get F (0). Please note that COPYONG one's work and writing the citation is still plagiarism. You need to paraphrase what the author said AND give reference. I'm sure some of you did not mean to copy but if it happened, please make sure that you only include your own writing and cite other people's work (e.g. say X (year) did this and that). Please read the guide for more information about how to avoid plagiarism. This is only a reminder so it does not necessarily relate to your work.
On the first page of your proposal, please include the following declaration.
((((I confirm that this research proposal is my own work and that it is not copied/translated from any other person's work, and that it has not been previously submitted for assessment either at King Faisal University or any other educational institution. NAME)))))

Please note that I write these comments to help you get a better mark and pass the course. I look forward to reading your Final draft.
Good luck!
Abdulaziz

[نجم عالي]

ومعليش سؤال ثالث هل المشروع بالنهايه يحتاج له إضافات مثل برواز وتخطيط أو أي شي يعطي البحث شكل جمالي ولا نرسله عادي .

[Saudi__]

اخ نجم عالي

بالنسبة للملاحظات الي عندك هي 2
Your title is very long , please improve it and make it concise.
The abstract should summarise your study.

الاولي : العنوان عندك طويل عنوان المشروع حاول انك تقصر منه ويكون واضحة بالنسبة لمشروعك
الثاني : تلخيص الدراسة حقت المشروع في الفقرة الاولي abstract يعني تقول انك راح تسوي في هذا البحث او المشروع كذا وكذا .....الخ

امل بالنسبة للزخرفة ما يحتاج اهم شي ترتيب الفقرات حاول تشوف المشاريع السابقة للاخوان الخريجين اللي اخذو A+ وتنسق مثلهم

وبالتوفيق للجميع

[ابولمبه]

· The title has to be specific. It must tell the reader what exactly s/he will read. General topics are not accepted. For example (teaching speaking in Saudi Arabia = general and not accepted / The effectiveness of X method in improving students' speaking fluency in Y school in Z city = clear and specific). Please read the guide for more information. Your title and other sections, clearly, have to reflect what you are going to include in the research questions/methodology sections.

· The clarity of expression needs some improvements (e.g. some sentences are not clearly written). You might need to revise your document for grammatical errors as well. Some students wrote notes instead of paragraphs so please be advised that this is not acceptable.

· The table of contents should be organized in headings (e.g. 1 ----- 1.1 / 2 --- 2.1) where necessary. This link shows you how to create a table of content. http://office.microsoft.com/en-us/wo...001225372.aspx

· Please follow the format suggested in the guide (e.g. title- abstract- introduction – literature review—methodology) and write paragraphs under each heading. Please organize your sections as suggested in the guide. Please avoid writing in notes or short phrases. A paragraph or so under each heading will be enough (read the guide for the exact number of paragraphs).

· When you introduce an idea, please cite the reference. In other words, tell the reader where you read this idea (e.g. X is important in teaching Y according to White (1995). Then you need to include this source in the reference list. You can use some websites to help you organize your reference lists (e.g. reference machine).

· In the significance of research section, you need to convince the reader about the importance of your research - not the topic (e.g. why is your research important?).

· Your literature review has to be written in a coherent way. The sentences have to be linked to each other logically. There must be a clear 'line of argument' that the reader can follow. Towards the end of the literature review section, you have to reach the RESEARCH GAP. In other words, you need to Say that X did this, Y did that which is similar to what Z did but nobody looked at this issue (and this will be your main research point/question). You can work on your existing literature review or add few references to make the line of argument clear. You didn't review any research paper here ! please read the guide.

· Your research question/s have to be specific and related to one point only, which is the focus of your study. Some students included two or more research questions that are not related to each other and this is not acceptable. Also, you need to clearly state your research question/s or hypotheses after describing them in the paragraph (e.g. in numbered notes).

· Your research question/s have to be specific and related to one point only, which is the focus of your study. Some students included two or more research questions that are not related to each other and this is not acceptable. Also, you need to clearly state your research question/s or hypotheses after describing them in the paragraph (e.g. in numbered notes).

· In the Ethical consideration section, you might want to mention whether your participants are vulnerable (e.g. children – people with special needs…etc.). Also you might want to mention that you will get the 'ethical approval' from your department/college before colleting the data. Think about the 'consent form' which is a form participants have to sign. What will you include in it ? perhaps telling them what you are going to do with the data and who will have access to it, how you will analyze the data, and your contact information. You also need to tell them that they can withdraw from the experiment at any time.


· Limitations of the study has nothing to do with where you will conduct the research (e.g. the study will be conducted here or there…etc.). It is about the factors that could negatively influence your research (e.g. time limitations, possible delays due to XXX, participants might not take the questionnaires seriously/understand it…etc.).

· Please avoid writing as if the study has been carried out and published as this is a 'proposal' (e.g. the participants 'did not do this and that'). This is a proposal so you can write about what 'might/could happen' while conducting the research. In other words, avoid using the past form 'the research was conducted in X city' and use the future 'the research will be conducted in….etc'.

· Please only cite references that you have used and cited in your writing. Some students included references that they have not used in their writing and that is time-consuming because I have to read and check whether that student used the article or not in his writing. If you used it, cite it like this – X (year) said/stated/proposed/advocated/…etc.


· Please follow APA citation guidelines available here http://www.library.cornell.edu/resrch/citmanage/apa

Or you can use an online service that will do that for you. http://www.citationmachine.net/apa/cite-a-book#

· GENERAL REMINDER: Please avoid PLAGIARISM, copying or translating anyone else's work/research. When you submit your final draft, your paper will have to be checked by a software that can detect any copied, paraphrased or translated work that has not been referenced. Plagiarized work will get F (0). Please note that COPYONG one's work and writing the citation is still plagiarism. You need to paraphrase what the author said AND give reference. I'm sure some of you did not mean to copy but if it happened, please make sure that you only include your own writing and cite other people's work (e.g. say X (year) did this and that). Please read the guide for more information about how to avoid plagiarism. This is only a reminder so it does not necessarily relate to your work.

· On the first page of your proposal, please include the following declaration.

((((I confirm that this research proposal is my own work and that it is not copied/translated from any other person's work, and that it has not been previously submitted for assessment either at King Faisal University or any other educational institution. NAME)))))
Please note that I write these comments to help you get a better mark and pass the course. I look forward to reading your Final draft.

اخي الكريم saudi هذي اللي ارسلها طبعا مع المقدمه . فالله يجزاك خير وش المطلوب وهذا نسخته عشان تفيدني ورحم الله والديك.

[ابولمبه]

اخ saudi بانتظار ردك ياغالي.

[Saudi__]

والله اخوي ابو لمبة ما اشوف اي ملاحظة مبين عليك دافور كل الملاحظات عامة بس شوف المشاريع السابقة للاخوان وحاول تسوي نفس الخطوات والفهرس واهم شي التعهد حسب كلام الدكتور في المحاضرة السادسة في الدقيقة 24 يشرح كيف كتابة التعهد ارجو منك مشاهدتها

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