تصحيح أخطائي

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السلام عليكم من باب الفائدة لي ولكم في تعلم الكتابة (writing paragraph ) راح أكتب براقرافات وانتوا ساعدوني وصححوا لي اخطائي والله يجزاكم خير

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بسم الله نبدأ طبعاً اني مستوايي بين الممبتدئ وبين المتوسط يعني إذا شفتوا عندي اخطاء واجد لا تستغربوا ومع الأيام إن شاء الله تعالى تتلاشى وتنعدم
اليوم عندي براقرافين اتمنى تساعدوني وتصححوا اخطائي وإذا تقدروا تكتبوا ليي سبب خطئي وأكون لكم من الشاكرين اترككم مع البراقراف الاول انتظروني خلال دقائق سأعود

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unhealthy habits

.They are many kinds of unhealthy habits we should avoid them
First of all, eating unhealthy food.What is unhealthy food ?The food which contains a lot of fat ,salt or calories . Eating a lot of food in the meal it is bad for everyone . It causes many kinds of diseases such as , chelsterol , dibeats , heart disease ...etc

Seconed , watching TV until med night so the students can,t foucous in the lesson or lecture well ,and .
.they can,t study or sleep enough time

Also,using the phone all the time . It is big problem in these days . It is bad for eyes ,and it causes many .disease

To conclude , we should replace bad habits with good habits ,to make this change we need patient and .along time [/C

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Describing My Father

I’ll describe my father in this paragraph let me start . He is tall. He is medium weight . He has got brown eyes. He has black and straight hair. He has beard and mustache. Finally my father is the best father in the world. They are no father like him.

[Hank]

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unhealthy habits

.They (There) are many kinds of unhealthy habits(. We) we should avoid them
First of all, eating unhealthy food (The first of all is eating ...).What is unhealthy food ? (It's) The food which contains a lot of fat ,salt or calories . Eating a lot of food in the meal it is bad for everyone (... meal is bad ...) . It causes many kinds of diseases such as , chelsterol (... as cholesterol ...) , dibeats (diabetes), heart disease (heart diseases) ...etc

Seconed , watching TV (The second is watching TV) until med night (midnight) so the students ( so students) can,t foucous in (focus on) the lesson or lecture well ,and .
.they can,t study or sleep enough time

Also,using the phone all the time (... the time is a bad habit ...) . It is big problem ( ... a big problem ...) in these days . It is bad for eyes ,and it causes many .disease ( many diseases)

To conclude , we should replace bad habits with good habits ,to make (. To make) this change we need patient (patience) and .along time

Nice one sis

Keep it up

[prestigious]

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Describing My Father

I’ll describe my father in this paragraph let me start . He is tall. He is medium weight . He has got brown eyes. He has black and straight hair. He has beard and mustache. Finally my father is the best father in the world. They are no father like him.

there is no one such my father in the world
أدق تعبيرأً ...(كقولك أبي نادر أو جوهرة ثمينه لا تشبه أحد )

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Thanks for help
I have a question
what the difference between there are >>>> and they are ... why I use There are in the begining of first paragraph ?

[Hank]

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Thanks for help
I have a question
what the difference between there are >>>> and they are ... why I use There are in the begining of first paragraph ?

You are welcome

عادة (وليس دائما) القطعة لا تبدأ بضمير, لأن الضمير عادة يشير إلى شيء ذكر من قبل, فبدل تكرار تسمية الشيء نستخدم الضمائر

فبدل ما نقول في أول جملة: هي أنواع كثيرة من العادات السيئة - صايرة الجملة ركيكة
نقول: هناك أنواع كثيرة من العادات السيئة

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Hank شكراً لك معلوماتك مفيدة جداً

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Sad Memory

Living in the life can’t be happy all the days. Some days happy, and other are sad . The most sad memory happened to me when I was child. We went to Al-Madinah , and I lost my way . In this moment I can’t doing anything .My mother and my father had tried to find me, After that I saw my father , and I hurried up to him . In this moment all of my family becoming happily .