this is not the right way to write a research proposal. Your first draft lacks almost 95% of the components that should be included in any research proposal. Go back to the manual project research and read carefully about what should your first draft contain.
Here is your first draft with one comment by the reference list part . look at it again and do the correction if there any ....important note : ( do not do the corrections and send again as a first draft ) you send your final draft when the official date comes . الرجال قال لي ان البحث يفتقد لأكثر من 95% من المكونات الاساسية للبحث بالرغم منأني عرضته على طلاب ماجستير بامتياز وطلاب ببريطانيا وقالو لي أنه perfect والله مدري ويس السواة هالحين