In this lecture the teacher will present some examples of good compositions and bad compositions. and we will see where the students did good job and where they did some mistakes and try to avoid them
في هذه المحاضرة الدكتور جاب بعض الأمثلة لكتابات طلاب وسيناقش الأمور الايجابية في البرقرافات وكمان الكتابات السيئة لبعض الطلاب وما هي الأخطاء التي وقعوا فيها وكيفية تجنبها
Example Composition 1
Advantages of Large colleges
So many people prefer Large colleges than the small ones for a lot of reasons. Large colleges offer so many majors so students can have different paths to choose from. And they accept more students than the small ones. They also have high-educated faculty and better facilities like libraries because of their huge budget, which leads to a high-quality of education. Beside that, they can offer high degrees in many majors.
This is a good paragraph because :
1- The good choice and use of some words like "majors, offer, paths , highly –educated faculty , better facilities , huge budget , high- quality of education, high degrees " اختيار الكلمات و استخدامها بشكل فعال و صحيح
2- She listed the reasons why large colleges are better than small ones
Example Composition 2
Advantage of big college Big college gives lot of facilities ;therefore , we have a various of tools to choose from. There is a big chance to meeting people from different nationality . There is a big campus .
This is an example of bad paragraph or bad composition because it has many mistakes :
1- First mistake is in the title ," big college ".. we should say "a big college" or big colleges ".
2- "Big college gives lot of facilities " we should say big college offers or has lot of facilities .
3- "Big chance to meeting people " …we should say to meet without "ing"
4- Different nationality …we should say different nationalities..
هذا كان مثال للبرقراف السيئ على قولة الدكتور !! لانه في أخطاء كثيرة من القواعد واختيار الكلمات
Example composition 3
From my point I think that small colleges best than big colleges for meny reasons, most important, the number of students in small colleges less therefore it will be Easier to make friends more, and also will be the number of students in each class is less so this make it easier for them to work together and communicate with their professors , the professors can adopt their courses to the students' concerns and build an interactive educational environment. so Small colleges have an advantage in communicating , Multiplicity of programs in college because the size and number of students is small and will be easy to have several means of education in college .
This example is not so good and not so bad "in between" because :
1- In mypoint in my point of view
2- Best better
3- Meny many "should check spelling mistakes"
4- Most important the most important reason is the number of……
5- Easier, Multiplicity, Small using the capital letter in the middle of the sentence ..
6- Make makes
هذه القطعة تحتوي على العديد من الأخطاء الواجب تجنبها مثل الأخطاء الإملائية و كذالك اختيار الكلمات لم يكن موفق مثل adopt , و كذالك إعادة بعض الكلمات ولكن الدكتور رأيه أن هذه الأخطاء طبيعية و هي نتيجة التعلم و لكن يجب اجتنابها مرة أخرى
Example Composition 4
Advantages of large college
The large college is very important than a small college, becaus it have many diffrentcourse and facilities. In addion, I prefer this kind of college. When I attend a large college, I can learn several things. First, I can learn a foreigni language. The large college have international students. They can help my to learn culture of them. The faculty in this college are nationalty, so they went to many differnt university sush as king Fisal university. Final,I am happy to study in large college.
1- Very ----more
2- Have ---- has
3- Course -------course
4- ,I prefer this kind of college ------- why ?? you do not give us reasons
5- Many speling mistakes " nationalty, differnt
6- learn culture of them---- their culture
هنا القطعة مليئة بالأخطاء مثل الأخطاء الإملائية و عدم وضوح الأفكار ... اخر جملة مش ضرورية .. هنا رأي الدكتور إن كاتب القطعة لم يكن مركز و غير مهتم لأنه ما سوى حتى مراجعة للسبلنق.
Homework Read “My Neighborhood” on page 26 in your textbook.