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Against Gravity · 2013- 1- 28

اقتباس:

Huge ambition ,with some depression

aren’t we all
??

amazing poem

i loved the beginning
but i didnt like the end
when you said that your thoughts feel lonely

thoughts dont feel?

maybe if you said
my thoughts being lonely
or being lonely with my thoughts
or i was alone with my thoughts trapped in my mind
seeking help
or make this line ( Calling mammy needs some help
after that

sending my dreams , go fly blind

anything rhymes with kind lol
see this site its useful if you want to make your poems rhyme

http://www.wordhippo.com/

one more thing , i dont know but i dont think its ok for an adult to say mammy im just saying

BTW where did you get that from? i mean american say mom and mommy and British say mum and mummy.
but mammy never heard of it
..
rate+ like
keep it goin and keep it comin