المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة yuuki

you have only found one mistake ?!! That's weird because i found so many in grammar, structure, punctuations .. Not to sound cocky but i've to say it for his own good and not just him all the others also have fatal mistakes especially the last line where he said " one, two, three ". Prestigious u should've said " once, twice .. Again and over again" or something like that. And i noticed u capitalise a lot of letters that u shouldn't but i know that's your style of writing but if u would accept my advice u would stop this way of writing cuz it's very confusing u see in literature we capitalise words that aren't names to personify it, and when u do that it's like u personify it or make it something in itself like a being u see why it's confusing?.
I hope i made this clear cuz i'm writing through my stupid bb so forgive any mistakes.