2013- 8- 4
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رد: تصحيح أخطائي
hello :)
.. I'll start and i really hope i could help you ..
from dawn to sunset
its better to say "from sunrise to sunset" .. clearer
There are some people excused
the sentence is a bit messy.. you might wanna say
" a lot of people get exhausted during fasting"
.. or ..
"there are some people who get exhausted "
i don't exactly get what you mean by
"woman who nursing a baby"
if you mean like .. baby sitting .. which is like .. taking care of a baby for amount of time then maybe you wanna use the term
" women who baby sit"
.All people happy in this day
"everyone is being happy in this day" ..
or .. "everyone get to be happy in this day"
or .. "everyone seems happy in this day"
these could work .. but your sentence is a bit weak because it doesn't contain verbs..
what do you mean by
"It helps me to control my self"
from which side are you talking about ? control what?
so i could help you out with closing up the passage :)
- hope i helped 
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التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة Lujain_o ; 2013- 8- 4 الساعة 02:17 PM
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