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Lujain_o · 2013- 8- 29

The Event Change My Life

I started studying when I was six years old. I studied day by day until I graduated from high school. I studied hard and got good test scores in high school, so I got into a good university. Graduate from high school and begin university student is the most important event in my life. I got lost a lot of friends, and I have new friends. I was talkative, but now I am quiet. Also, I was an excellent student, but now I am lazy student. I was happy all the time, but now I always sad. To sum up, Graduate from high school and begin university student is the most important event in my life. It changed many things in my life.

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The Event Change My Life
add "that" its the same as saying
"اللتي"
.. and make the verb past, so
The even that changed my life

good test scores
it's better to say
Good grades

and begin university student is the most important event in my life.
لكي يكون التعبير اجمل ..
and getting into university was an important event in my life

I got lost a lot of friends
you don't need the verb "got" so you just say
I lost a lot of friends

and I have new friends
اطلقي العنان للتعبير .. حاولي تستخدمين كلمات متناسقه لبعض ، زي
but that's okay because i made new friends

but now I am lazy student
you need to add an A when you're referring to something or making a status, so
but now i am a lazy student.

I was happy all the time, but now I always sad.
its not right to say: I always sad
you forget the am ! so ..
now I'm always say
بس افضل تعبيرا لو تقولين
but now I'm feeling sad most of the time

To sum up, Graduate from high school and begin university student is the most important event in my life.
you don't have any mistake in this line but ..
try to sometimes use some new words.. and always try your best to describe as much as possible .. so you could say:

so basically, graduating from high school and starting a university life was again, the very important even that happened in my life.
_________

you're getting better <3
اسفه لو تفلسفت واجد .. بس اتمنى لك الافضل ! حتى لو ما اخطاتي
and don't forget to post more :P i enjoy helping you

2013- 8- 29	#47
Lujain_o أكـاديـمـي نــشـط الملف الشخصي: رقم العضوية : 151184 تاريخ التسجيل: Sun Aug 2013 المشاركات: 118 الـجنــس : أنـثـى عدد الـنقـاط : 65 مؤشر المستوى: 52 بيانات الطالب: الكلية: كليه الآداب الدراسة: انتظام التخصص: انجليزي المستوى: المستوى الرابع	رد: تصحيح أخطائي The Event Change My Life I started studying when I was six years old. I studied day by day until I graduated from high school. I studied hard and got good test scores in high school, so I got into a good university. Graduate from high school and begin university student is the most important event in my life. I got lost a lot of friends, and I have new friends. I was talkative, but now I am quiet. Also, I was an excellent student, but now I am lazy student. I was happy all the time, but now I always sad. To sum up, Graduate from high school and begin university student is the most important event in my life. It changed many things in my life. ______ The Event Change My Life add "that" its the same as saying "اللتي" .. and make the verb past, so The even that changed my life good test scores it's better to say Good grades and begin university student is the most important event in my life. لكي يكون التعبير اجمل .. and getting into university was an important event in my life I got lost a lot of friends you don't need the verb "got" so you just say I lost a lot of friends and I have new friends اطلقي العنان للتعبير .. حاولي تستخدمين كلمات متناسقه لبعض ، زي but that's okay because i made new friends but now I am lazy student you need to add an A when you're referring to something or making a status, so but now i am a lazy student. I was happy all the time, but now I always sad. its not right to say: I always sad you forget the am ! so .. now I'm always say بس افضل تعبيرا لو تقولين but now I'm feeling sad most of the time To sum up, Graduate from high school and begin university student is the most important event in my life. you don't have any mistake in this line but .. try to sometimes use some new words.. and always try your best to describe as much as possible .. so you could say: so basically, graduating from high school and starting a university life was again, the very important even that happened in my life. _________ you're getting better <3 اسفه لو تفلسفت واجد .. بس اتمنى لك الافضل ! حتى لو ما اخطاتي and don't forget to post more :P i enjoy helping you
	التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة Lujain_o ; 2013- 8- 29 الساعة 10:35 PM